Just
Watch
My arms’
Wild eschew,
Wave like willow wisps
Arabesque, across the window
As you try to sleep. Fear not my wistful ways; just watch.
*
(First published in The FIB Review, Oct. ’12)
Linked to dVersePoets:OpenLinkNight
Ballerina Branches
Filed under dVerse Poetry, Fibonacci, laurie kolp poetry, OpenLinkNight
I always loved this one.
Thank you, Linda.
Hey,hey – a Fibonacci poem, and a beautiful one too. Nicely done, Laurie.
Appreciate it, Tony.
My first time seeing this one. Such a cool effect with the Fibonacci shape and your strong images. It makes me feeling like stretching.
ah its fun to watch…smiles..love the alliteration in this…and the dance as well…my wife being a ballerina you had me right up front…really nice form too…
ballerina branches…so cool…it was very windy here today as well…so our branches danced as well…smiles
Beautiful, Laurie. I love the form and the visual. Love ‘wave like willow wisps.’
Love this, Laurie. I can visualize it
Beautiful! I can see this so clearly and I love this form, something I have yet to try!
Beautiful words.
Beautiful – a wonderful dance in the wind – K
beautiful, i love the shape & all the w-words especially – for me, this is the pear tree that lives outside my window, dancing, gesturing, tapping…
This reminds me I must get out my clippers. My shrubs are less like ballerinas and more like witches with claws :/
Beautiful!
So gracefully described.
Beautiful, Laurie…it’s been ages since I tried a fibonacci…lovely form!
It’s always a pleasure to read your words, Laurie, and this is no exception. I always wanted to be a dancer, but I am not blessed with grace in that area. I love to watch anything that moves in rhythm, and the idea of the branches of tree dancing in the wind like a ballerina? Well, I think it’s lovely
So whimsical and light and I love this form. Well done.
Very nice and succinct.
Lovely imagery!
Very nice and it is good to have a chance to come back after so long to join open link night. I am happy to read your post. If you would like here is my entry for the week. http://gatelesspassage.com/2013/02/02/reflections/
I don’t know much about ballet or ballerinas but I felt like a child on a swing.
Cheers,
Mark Butkus
PS I did not go to the Super Bowl…no Giants…no point. Next year…
hey, i used eschew this week too!! does that mean anything? quick compare our horoscopes (just kidding)
i had a choreography instructor who told us to go look at the branches of the trees and get five shapes, then string the shapes together in a dance.
enjoyed the “shape” of this
WOW. This is exactly right! Beautiful, playful, and alive! The fib form is intriguing to me too.
This is just gorgeous…. When I was a child, I was terrified of those same shadow shapes on the wall of my bedroom… These days, I am happy to watch.
and now I need to learn more about this form.
Cool structure and images!
I like the repetition of “W” here and what a cool image! Nicely done.
You always plunge into new forms and ideas like bulldog poet, and you do get your lovely teeth into it. Never realized that form was called Fibonacci. I like to shape the lines into forms too; more fun than art for me.
lovely. and I do enjoy watching, but there are times when my mind gets the better of me.
Love it! I love the sound you have created and Fibonacci is one of my favorite forms. Cheers!
Laurie, so glad you share this here. I love the imagery and form. Wonderful.
Sweet like a breeze – love it!
I will have to hit my dictionary to learn what Fibonacci is, but regardless, I really like the picture this paints. Well written, dear poet!
I love this!
Cool. I like the form. Giving emphasis to the first words then gradually leading the reader into really cool imagery and thought.
I didn’t realize until I read this that I most often associate tree shadows as something scary. I like that these branches are friendly and dancing.
I can hear them… they wake me, too. I LOVE Fibonacci! In fact, you’ll be seeing them in the next few weeks at PU!
As I always say – poetry is metaphor; and in this verse you wring every nuance from your ballerina metaphor.
LOVE this, Laurie.
Is eschew a ballet term? New one to me. Interesting. Not “askew”?
I love to watch how a tree’s branches dance within the wind… I can see these dancing as well. Beautiful!
A great fib, the words suit the form and the form suits the words. Ideal.
So well done.. now i am going to try one for next weeks open link night:) you are an inspiration,
I shall watch enthralled – unless I can tempt you to a pas de deux!
I liked the mood this brought on. Warm and Friendly. Great word selection btw! =)
Interesting form – have to find out more about it. And ‘seek not to analyse nor understand beauty, just enjoy’ – great philosophy.
beautiful….I can see the dance in my mind’s eye:-)
This is lovely! I like the form.
Beautiful!
Pretty piece, Laurie.
Pamela
Love the ballerina branches. Wonderful application of form.
I miss my willow trees. This is so good. NIcely crafted.
Beautiful form and visual
Smiles. Them branches must be dancing ballet <3