Sunshine
fills stagnant air
with springtime charm. Listen
to the birds, watch green reappear
like you.
Hidden
beneath darkness
too long, you rise above
and like the sun in March, welcome
new life.
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Poetic inspiration~ dVersePoets:FormForAll~TheCinquain w/ Tony!
there’s magic in the songs of the birds..so waiting for spring as well… it snowed over here yesterday…so think i have to wait a few more days…sigh
The end on your first cinquain blew me away. Perfect merging of two thoughts.
ah….come on spring…i think we all are getting a little fever for spring….smiles….def that end line on the first one, really cool turn there laurie….
I have a fondness for March as well, and yes the sun welcomes new life (albeit ours is still beneath snow….but I did see a robin today! smiles). Your poem is an excellent reminder of what is to come.
Your welcoming the sun, and I’m welcoming the rain – the strangeness of living in different hemispheres!
Amen.
…i like that the Sun in march is welcoming you new forms of life in your place…but her…ah, it kills..so hot & i guess will get hotter in april &may… smiles…
Spring is here for Laurie! We get to enjoy it in your words…
New life does seem to a theme tonight. Or the winter stubbornly clinging.
It’s been wet here but a lot of birds singing in the wee hours and bulbs starting to sprout…these are sweet..
stunning imagery, Laurie. so beautifully structured and perfect for this season.
I am ready to welcome the springtime charm Laurie ~ Lovely cinquain poems ~
Lovely imagery and I love how the two weave together so smoothly. Excellent way to work the form.
Both wonderful – you captured these blessings in words perfectly.
Both lovely cinquains, Laurie. The last line of the first one simply blew me away – I wasn’t expecting those words at all!
This has a wonderful Easter vibe to it for me!
resurrection in so many forms… lovely, Laurie!
your beautiful words just make me happy – loved the rising of the March sun and the springtime charm! K
I like both. I like them together too. They fit well like that. Spring is getting closer – my sneezes are a nice foreshadow heh.
Evergreen beauty to read and reread ! Sincerely Deborah
This is wonderful.
Beautiful, Laurie.
For some reason I never thought to do two in a row to broaden my thoughts. Hmm… beautiful!!
loved the unfolding of spring a.k.a. new life!
watch green reappear like you…lovely!
I wish! Sweet, shy, hopeful, like early spring itself… lovely!
A lovely, celebratory double cinquain.
A sweet ode to the new seasons!
truly… welcoming
I love the rebirth that comes with spring, and you discribe it wonderfully here!
I love everything about spring and the themes of rebirth. Very nice.
whoever has reappeared is intriguing; a lovely duo of cinquains. We in the Northwest have had a very mild winter, and yes, Spring & Easter will be upon us before we know it. Life is bubbling just below the frost.
Lovely cadences here. k.
Very inspirational cinquain about spring. Many of us chose some theme on spring for our poem. I can’t wait…
Love spring imagery and you’ve captured it well here, and the green reaper is particularly brilliant.
Great capture of the arising! Yet I shall miss the Winter — I miss each seasoning.
lovely. this so makes me long for spring to be in full bloom.
delightful…I can’t wait for spring..