when he shot her down.
Infuriation, wells of blood.
Dripping glass, the shears she held after the fact. Too late.
Poetic inspiration~ dVersePoets: FFA -> Mathematical Series w/ Tony
Filed under dVerse Poetry, Fibonacci, Form For All
oh heck… what a tightly painted scene…dang… there’s a too late for sure..
the shears she held after the fact….the dripping glass…those lines def put the exclamation point on this one for me….nice laurie…
Timing can be essential in such a duel; was cheering her, but alas too late it seems. Poetry as mathematics kind of befuddles me; nice use of form for you though.
This brought a lump to my throat, Laurie!
This is definitely a walk on the dark side, Laurie, but really tightly penned.
Whoop… that is dark and I like it.
Your first stanza is very strong
Wow, Laurie, I can feel the anger…
Wow, extremely powerful. The anger was most definitely palpable.
Well…gulp. That is some powerful stuff there Laurie.
Dark ending Laurie ~ Well done ~
Oh well done indeed!
Well this was definitely powerful. Rage can do that. Suddenly it’s too late. Words like that can incite rage. Men should be more careful…
That was heavey… the rage the rage… and what you can do with a weapon.
Poetry with maths is so exciting! The choice of sequences are varied adding to the fun. Tight call here and wonderful take Laurie!
Sad and strong–not to mention great use of the form too.
that “too late” echoing regrets
Rather too late, indeed. Guns are usually faster than blades.
Really tight, concise and well written. Thanks.
Gosh, a dark tale so concisely penned!
Laurie, powerfully succinct, the message clear and dramatic. Nicely done.
Excellent, so much power and energy tied up in this… well done!
no room for regrets but rather pay the consequnece… tight… tight… tight… and so perfect for a fib… smiles…
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